to steal
my heart shall not
be such an easy task
it's locked behind an iron door
and guarded by ferocious starving fear
intent on twistings breathless sighs
around until I hear
the truth as lies
quite real
this love of mine
will fight and strive
against the demons that hide
inside of you my precious sweet
my words will find a way to ring as true
I know my touch can set you free
there's no denying us
your heart I will
reveal
A note on form: I continue today with another verse written in a form inspired by dVerse Poets Pub prompt to invent a new form or variation on a form. The form above was developed by Gay Reiser Cannon (who actually created the prompt to start with). She has dubbed it by two names, "Falling Diamonds" and "Quarrel."
"It is composed of a series of lines beginning with one line of one iambic foot, then two, three, four, five, four, three, two iambic feet and then again one iambic foot where the one foot lines must rhyme. Basically then the form is blank verse that is shaped in diamonds or triangles with one sustaining middle rhyme. You may choose to add either internal or end rhymes as well but the only requirement is for the one foot lines to rhyme. Hyphenating end words is prohibited. A minimum of two diamonds should be made." (Cannon, 2014)As I have mentioned in the past iambic feet, or meter in general, is not really my cup of tea. Maybe that is why I stopped at two diamonds instead of continuing on. What I did try to do, reading Gay's note on writing the piece where each diamond is a different view point, was try to write this as though two different people are speaking. In addition, I made it so that the single foot in the middle could be read with either piece indepentently of the other...linking them.
On creating in form: It is not alwasys easy to follow through with an idea in a given form, whether that be becasue the heart is not in it or it just doesn't flow quite as easily as hoped. Anyway, I had three (well almost three) half diamonds started prior to this piece. I don't know if it was the given-and-take I was trying to accomplish that I couldn't wrap myself around or the meter. Either way they found themselves scribbles in my notebook...
8 comments:
Very cool. Love how you shared your process with us.
ha. it is def not easy to follow form...i think that is in the definition of form actually..ha
if a heart was easy to steal would it be worth it? smiles
Nice work here RMP!
I like the change in perspective between diamond one and two.
This be a hard form to follow - but I enjoyed the poem. The pics of the rough drafts were a nice touch.
You did such a good job with Gay's form. I find it so pleasant to see and, in this case, to read. It seemed to add a bit of intensity!
You did such a good job with Gay's form. I find it so pleasant to see and, in this case, to read. It seemed to add a bit of intensity!
cool to see the scribbles in your notebook as well... sounds like quite a demanding form... smiles... and stealing so.'s heart is def. never an easy task..smiles
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