Sunday, April 13, 2014

Meant to Be

to steal 
my heart shall not 
be such an easy task 
it's locked behind an iron door 
and guarded by ferocious starving fear 
 intent on twistings breathless sighs 
around until I hear 
the truth as lies 
quite real 
this love of mine 
will fight and strive 
against the demons that hide 
inside of you my precious sweet 
my words will find a way to ring as true 
I know my touch can set you free 
there's no denying us 
your heart I will 
reveal


A note on form: I continue today with another verse written in a form inspired by dVerse Poets Pub prompt to invent a new form or variation on a form. The form above was developed by Gay Reiser Cannon (who actually created the prompt to start with). She has dubbed it by two names, "Falling Diamonds" and "Quarrel."
"It is composed of a series of lines beginning with one line of one iambic foot, then two, three, four, five, four, three, two iambic feet and then again one iambic foot where the one foot lines must rhyme. Basically then the form is blank verse that is shaped in diamonds or triangles with one sustaining middle rhyme. You may choose to add either internal or end rhymes as well but the only requirement is for the one foot lines to rhyme. Hyphenating end words is prohibited. A minimum of two diamonds should be made." (Cannon, 2014)
As I have mentioned in the past iambic feet, or meter in general, is not really my cup of tea. Maybe that is why I stopped at two diamonds instead of continuing on. What I did try to do, reading Gay's note on writing the piece where each diamond is a different view point, was try to write this as though two different people are speaking. In addition, I made it so that the single foot in the middle could be read with either piece indepentently of the other...linking them.

On creating in form: It is not alwasys easy to follow through with an idea in a given form, whether that be becasue the heart is not in it or it just doesn't flow quite as easily as hoped. Anyway, I had three (well almost three) half diamonds started prior to this piece. I don't know if it was the given-and-take I was trying to accomplish that I couldn't wrap myself around or the meter. Either way they found themselves scribbles in my notebook...












9 comments:

Mystic_Mom said...

Very cool. Love how you shared your process with us.

Brian Miller said...

ha. it is def not easy to follow form...i think that is in the definition of form actually..ha

if a heart was easy to steal would it be worth it? smiles

Poet Laundry said...

Nice work here RMP!

quest4peas said...

I like the change in perspective between diamond one and two.

Jerry E Beuterbaugh said...

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Buddah Moskowitz said...

This be a hard form to follow - but I enjoyed the poem. The pics of the rough drafts were a nice touch.

Victoria said...

You did such a good job with Gay's form. I find it so pleasant to see and, in this case, to read. It seemed to add a bit of intensity!

Victoria said...

You did such a good job with Gay's form. I find it so pleasant to see and, in this case, to read. It seemed to add a bit of intensity!

Claudia said...

cool to see the scribbles in your notebook as well... sounds like quite a demanding form... smiles... and stealing so.'s heart is def. never an easy task..smiles