Wednesday, March 12, 2014

In the Breeze

wishes
ladened with tears
cling to
frayed edges

still breath
expels
seeds of hope




A note on form:  This little number is known as a septolet.  It is composed of 7 line composed of 14 words set in two stanzas.  (It is supposed to create a picture.)  I have not really found any solid rules on the number of words per stanza, but in most examples I have seen they are almost never evenly broken up 7 and 7.  There is also no specifics on where the break occurs, but most examples break after either the 3rd or 4th line.

While "creating a picture" is still a bit of conundrum, I still enjoy exploring this form.  It is short & sweet and makes for a nice "tweetoetry" piece.


Inspiration for this piece:  Yesterday over at dVerse Poets Pub, the prompt was on micro poetry inspired by macro photography.  I have for the past several years enjoyed (viewing) macro photography.  It seems so interesting how you can get up close and personal with such small entities and see so much detail.  If I felt like a ramble today, I'd probably go into how perfect macro photography relates to poetry (in comparison to typical photography relating to prose), but lucky you I'm not in a rambling mood.  Anyway...it took me a while to find the right photo.  I was actually in search of a different photo that I had seen ages ago, but was unable to dig it up.  Anyway...in the process I found a (several) pictures of dew drops on dandelion seeds...and seeing as I have a thing for dandelions in their puffy form, I ended up captured (no pun intended).

This piece of micropoetry is 82 characters long; this includes spaces and returns as single characters.  Thus keeping within the 140 character limit (and if posted on twitter allows rooms for hashtags and mentions).

The photos that inspired this piece are by Sharon Johnstone.

17 comments:

Brian Miller said...

def nice when you can breath...and hope...no matter the pressure...having a rough week here...so i am still breathing...

Rosemary Nissen-Wade said...

Very evocative of both dewdrops and dandelion puffballs - and thank you for introducing me to the septolet.

Björn said...

What a wonderful experience to read. What a great experience to read it and then look at the picture.. Great effect

Mystic_Mom said...

Ah so good. Thanks for sharing in the narrative as well.

Abhra said...

Such beautiful and peaceful words - glad you could join in.

Heidi said...

Yay! I have new form for my poetry notebook. A septolet is next on my list to try. I love how you translated the pictures...lovely work!

De said...

I especially love:
"still breath
expels
seeds of hope"

Beautiful.

Claudia said...

i love the seeds of hope there in the end...so comforting when they're still there even though the time is difficult..

ramblingsfromamum said...

I think I love the detailed explanation of your piece as much as I loved your micro, the photos are absolutely amazing also - thank you ~ smiles

Victoria said...

Breath-taking. I enjoyed being introduced to the form as well. I didn't get the photo for some reason but between the poem and your process notes I could visualize it well.

Mary said...

What a powerful write. I really like the last stanza. We all need to find the seeds of hope.

vb holmes said...

No matter what happens, we still have wishes and we still have hope. An upbeat message with lovely photos as inspirations.

Gabriella said...

I had no idea what a septolet was until today. I like the subtle balance between your two stanzas.

Beachanny said...

I like this form and what you did with it. You made feel with your words - succinct and accurate!

mywordwall said...

This is very meaningful poem in so few words. There seems to be a contrast of ideas in the stanzas - clinging vs. expelling. The latter stanza can be taken two different ways, too - life and death. Very well done. :-) Thanks for the heads up about the form.

Heaven said...

Short & full of imagery ~ I love what you created with just a few words ~

Poet Laundry said...

I especially like that last stanza. Nicely done RMP.