Thursday, November 13, 2014

Suddenly ~ Blackout Poetry #6


unmistakeable
ever-present
sadness

     rendered
        even more poignant
           by choked emotions
           gathering as night falls;

     sequestered by
        enveloping anguish

suddenly

cried out in pain

lost
     in doubt and visions
        of nothing




A note on form:  Blackout poetry...Erasure poetry...Redacted poetry...by whatever name you wish to call it....  The above construction is formed by taking an already existing piece of work (whether from a book or newspaper or any other written entity) and removing words until you are left with something that hopefully makes sense.

About this series:  My goal is to challenge myself to unearth some semblance of sense through the use of blackout/erasure poetry.

Attribution:   Blackout Poetry unearthed from a page in Lee Smith’s novel, Oral History.

12 comments:

Vandana Sharma said...

all the emotions wrapped up in the veil of night................

Victoria said...

It's so fun to work with erasure poetry. Nicely done.

Poet Laundry said...

Excellent. I think I've said it before, but you really have a knack for this poetic tool.

Mary said...

Very sad -- visions of nothing especially!

Björn Rudberg said...

When visions are nothing.. that's the best of times.

Jeff said...

Powerful--I like this one a lot!

Brian Miller said...

well the emotion certainly comes through...that is a sadness much like a blanket wrapping the legs that you are unable to escape...

Björn Rudberg said...

Hi - just so you know.. I will have black-out poetry in my prompt for dVerse this Thursday.. I might refer to you if I'm allowed..

Brian Miller said...

happy new year you...smiles

RMP said...

I look forward to seeing your dVerse prompt on Blackout Poetry.... Please feel free to refer to any of the pieces I have liberated.

Jennifer Wagner said...

Where you been? I've been missing your work!

Brian Miller said...

hey you...how have you been?
4 months is a long time...smiles.