Thursday, November 6, 2014

The Switch ~ Blackout Poetry #5





the moon
was keeping time
with the sun

night
switched
pink to silver white
then orange
shinning all over

day







A note on form:  Blackout poetry...Erasure poetry...Redacted poetry...by whatever name you wish to call it....  The above construction is formed by taking an already existing piece of work (whether from a book or newspaper or any other written entity) and removing words until you are left with something that hopefully makes sense.

About this series:  My goal is to challenge myself to unearth some semblance of sense through the use of blackout/erasure poetry.

Attribution:   Blackout Poetry unearthed from a page in Lee Smith’s novel, Oral History.

5 comments:

Brian Miller said...

ha. i like your use of colors on the actual page...like the use of color in the words too...sounds like a lovely morning coming on...

so what are you taking your pages from?

RMP said...

#1 – #3 are from a novel called The Poison Tree and #4 – #6 are from a novel called Oral History.

Vandana Sharma said...

The beautiful transition from night to day!

Jeff said...

Lovely--this form is addicting, almost like a scavenger hunt, looking for golden phrases or words. You're pretty good at it! I think this is the best one yet.

Björn Rudberg said...

The breaking of dawn said in the fewest of words.. I like blackout poetry.. I have to try it someday...