Inspiration for these pieces: Over at dVerse Poets Pub, entry into this weeks MeetTheBar is a piece less than or equal to 40 words. Today I'm surging up three pieces that flow quite well together. Each is under 40...including their titles and the sum total of words (including titles) is 40. The first is 16+4=20; the second is 7+3=10; the third is 8+2=10.
Straight to the Heart
thunder rumbles as
darkness thickens the room
lightning clashes in
sharp tongues intent
on striking true.
Bitter (no) Sweet
harsh tones
thicken the air
suffocating love
Edgy Art
patience wanes
brushing hearts
black
with snide
retorts
An aside: On vacation...wifi is spotty...plus we're keeping ourselves quite busy. Making the rounds will be tricky, but where there's a will there's a way...it just might take a little longer an normal.
13 comments:
Sharp words can certainly cut every bit as deep as a knife.
darkness thickens the room... harsh tones thicken the air... and then
brushing hearts
black... flows very nicely.
"lightning clashes in
sharp tongues"..striking imagery..like the darkness woven in the pieces.. :)
How those words can work like thunderstorms.. The imagery is perfect for those situations when air is thick with resentment.
These are excellent. Beautifully expressed images of conflict.
Nice, I specially like bitter (no) sweet ~ Enjoy your vacation ~
def evocative...and emotive....
the last two in particular...the harsh tones and patience go together...and it all rolls to heartbreak....
the harsh tones suffocating love....so true... the wrong words can bury every spark of love and symphathy
Oh yes, harsh tones can suffocate love indeed. I like all three of yours.. I can FEEL each of them.
A very good series, rmp. I find that harsh tones, especially when repeated, do suffocate love, sometimes until there is no love left.
That second one packs a lot in a few words--choking on the thick air of harsh words. Very well done!
Strong pieces...can so relate...have experienced that thick air and those sharp tongues. Excellent...I really enjoyed these...and enjoy the rest of your vacation!
Perfect images for the subject, nicely done.
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