Friday, June 7, 2013

While You Crossed the Room

Him:  Hi.

Her:  Fair warning, in the time it took you to cross the room, in my head we married and adopted three kids—all stamped “made in the USA” so no worries there.  But it’s all good ‘cause I can definitely compartmentalize fabrication from reality—as long as the real kiss isn’t worse than the one in my head.

Him:  Are you trying to scare me off?  Or trying to get me to kiss you?

Her:  Well, reality does have a way of getting in the way of fabricated love.  Then again, if the kiss is better than imagined, I might be inclined to add two kids of our own making.

[He nodded in contemplation of her logic; then locked eyes with her before leaning in and kissing her until everything disappears around them.  He pulls back; her eyes still closed; his face just inches from hers.]

Him:  I think we’d make rather cute kids.

Her:  hmm…quite beautiful, if I do say so myself.

[He closes the distance and kisses her again.]



On (or about) conversation:  I have always liked dialogue.  Maybe it has to do with the fact that I struggle so with it in the real world.  I suppose part of it also stems from my dislike of details, which is why I tend to write poetry over prose—you get to cut out all of the extra nonsensical words and details.  I actually wrote a whole novel completely in dialogue prior to going back, typing it up, and adding in all of the extras; I really do have an aversion to lengthy prose.  Maybe I missed my calling as a playwright or screenwriter.

4 comments:

Nico said...

A lot of smiles on this one--I like writing dialog as well. Nice snap--sounds like my kind of girl! (My wife asked me out on our first date--I was too shy to make the first move!!)

Brian Miller said...

nice...you did well with the dialogue...and you can create quite the story in just what they are saying to each other...warm scene...made me smile

Mary said...

I enjoyed your dialogue. I do think dialogue is easier to write than the details of setting, action, etc. I co-authored two novels. Reading your dialogue makes me want to try THAT kind of writing again, but one disadvantage is that writing a novel takes so long. Writing a poem gives quicker gratification.

J Cosmo Newbery said...

Love what you have done here. And writing your own dialogue is so much more satisfying than trying to manouver real conversations to where you want them.