Sunday, September 8, 2013

Golden (though Orange Duct Tape will Do)

Golden (though Orange Duct Tape will Do)

An aside:  I was reading over the poem and I could help but feel as though my choice in keeping certain words together in a strip altered the way I wanted it to be heard.  So I went back in and changed the version you see below to the one above.  I realize it seems like such a subtle change, but still....  The only thing left lingering in my head is whether or not "it" should be replaced with "she."  hmm...

Golden (though Orange Duct Tape will Do)
[original version]

4 comments:

Mary said...

I like the "it" rather than the 'she.' I think we want to know what the SILENCE says!

(I have long had the theory that often silence speaks louder than words and that what is unsaid is often more important than what is said.)

Brian Miller said...

very pointed....like a BAM...but def thought provoking as well...the silence is def speaking something and that scares me more than the ones using words inappropriately cause i at least know what is going on...

Heaven said...

Goodness what a strong write ~ Her eyes though tell a story ~

Anna Chamberlain said...

Haunting, the duct tape was especially frightening. Possibly a story of abuse forcibly silenced and very well told.